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“They All End Up Walking In Circles”

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…………………………THEY ALL END UP WALKING IN CIRCLES
……………………………..~ with a line by Matt Moore of Associated Press
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…………………………Walking, they have no way
…………………………to chart through clouded skies,
…………………………bearing down upon the layers
…………………………of leaf and soil and stone,
…………………………eroding as do the seasons
………………………...the pathless shifting terrain
…………………………of black spiders, red efts, and
…………………………possums. Their steps are felt
…………………………from below as a quaking fault,
…………………………the pile-by-pile collapse
…………………………of an orchard wall, a fox’s
…………………………low surveillance. Beneath them
…………………………are shin bones buried in
…………………………the round, sockets not seeing
…………………………the veer of the moon,
…………………………and jaws unable to say
…………………………to the lost ones above
…………………………as they walk and slip into
…………………………a ring of heat and then
…………………………a trace of dew, how false
…………………………are North and South.
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…………………………by Therese L. Broderick
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Writer’s Statement — The title of this poem is a slight modification of a line in an article by AP journalist Matt Moore who reported on a study about people who get lost. I emailed Mr. Moore, and he has seen this poem.
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About ThereseLBroderick

Independent community poet living in Albany, New York USA.

13 responses »

  1. Thanks for linking to my blog!
    And I don’t know where to start about how much I love this poem…the sound, the images, and the last line – all brilliant. Really.

  2. Very nice! I especially like the buried jaw bones — actually the whole last sentence.

  3. I keep coming back to “shin bones buried in the round”. I really like this.

  4. Very good, AGAIN! You picked the same headline as another poet and yet both pieces are so original…

  5. “sockets not seeing
    the veer of the moon,
    and jaws unable to say
    to the lost ones above”

    All of the lines referencing bones are very effective!

  6. Great imagery, and a much more evocative take on the headline than I chose :). I especially loved the use of the shin bones, sockets and jaws.

  7. Beautiful take on the headline; it builds nicely and the end is perfect.

  8. I love

    the pathless shifting terrain
    of black spiders, red efts, and
    possums.

    and

    the pile-by-pile collapse
    of an orchard wall, a fox’s
    low surveillance.

    Your imagery is so sure! It’s great walking with you through pathless woods.

    (A small suggestion: should the nouns in the last lines be capitalized? I think you’re describing compass points as opposed to regions . . .)

  9. Wonderful work. Those final three lines are especially beautiful.

  10. What a lovely sentiment, Therese. I love your narrative style, as well as the terrain you chose for the piece.

  11. I love your use of sound, lots of monosyllabic words and onomatopoeia,
    lots of slant rhyme (e.g. “felt,” “fault,” “wall”), great ending with the allusion to the dead below (literal) and above (figuratively) and the slipping into “a ring of heat” and a “trace of dew.”

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