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Copeland

ARTIST : Sarah Copeland (see her blog HERE)

ARTWORK : photograph The Eyes See posted on blog Every Photo Tells a Story, January 2, 2009 ; photo is also on Sarah Copeland’s blog

NOTE : The artist has seen the poem. An earlier version of this poem was first published as a comment on the above EPTAS blog, January 2, 2009. The poem was influenced, in part, by the daily photo/poem postings on The Storialist.

 

The Eyes See

They do.
But differently, just as no two

hats will shade a girl’s face
in the same way.

See how black lines and smudges
are almost shutting

the eye on the left
(her right), and yet

the eye on the right
(her left) is widening to white.

Just wait for a single wink
to fit that cowgirl rim.

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by Therese L. Broderick

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About ThereseLBroderick

Independent community poet living in Albany, New York USA.

2 responses »

  1. ABOUT THIS POEM

    My goal when composing any poem is to craft a passage of spoken language in which sound is at least as alluring as sense.

    SOUND

    Each distich ends with a vowel rhyme. The words in parentheses require a slightly lower pitch or volume when read — a lowering of voice similar to the lowering lid of a wink.

    SENSE

    The opening words “They do. / But differently…” are intended to lure the reader into reading the rest of the poem. The words in parentheses take the reader’s/listener’s attention back and forth from one eye to the other — thereby emphasizing the differences between them. The last two lines add another layer of “seeing” — not only do different pairs of eyes see differently, but a girl wearing a particular hat has a very particular angle of vision.

  2. Thank you, Therese, for referencing my blog!

    I love that you explain and educate your reader about your poem and writing process. I agree that the opening words lure the reader in, and also provides great tension.

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